New song & video! Feedback needed please! (1 Viewer)

[Muso1070]

Hello all, i'm a singer/songwriter from Northern Ireland and just wanted to share with you a new tune i put together a few weeks ago called Tonight.
I was lucky enough to be invited over to perform in Nashville USA at the famous Bluebird Cafe back in June and it was that trip that inspired me to write this song.
Its a pretty chilled out tune with a summery feel to it.
Check it out below if you have a spare moment for new music.
All feedback welcome

Cheers
Chris

http://www.chriskeys.com/
https://www.facebook.com/chriskeysofficial

Chris Keys - Tonight (Live)

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[Muso1070]

Anyone got feedback for me? trying to improve in anyway i can!!

Chris

 

[Anthony]

Too long. I'm not really qualified to comment on the actual music.

 

[Muso1070]

Hey thanks for your feedback and you are qualified as long as you have ears

 

[GO]

Its nicely produced.Nice song too.

Needs better arranging.Nothing happens for almost a minute after the singing starts.Chop that first part in half..and halfway through whats left augment it with some harmonic development.

First chorus is grand.

Second verse needs halving too..lose the little humming bit..and bring us back to the chorus in timely fashion.This time have a harmonised backing vocal to up the energy.Possibly even some kinda percussion

Make sure its no longer than 3 mins...unless you come up with something radical that warrants the extra running time.

 

[Muso1070]

Its nicely produced.Nice song too.

Needs better arranging.Nothing happens for almost a minute after the singing starts.Chop that first part in half..and halfway through whats left augment it with some harmonic development.

First chorus is grand.

Second verse needs halving too..lose the little humming bit..and bring us back to the chorus in timely fashion.This time have a harmonised backing vocal to up the energy.Possibly even some kinda percussion

Make sure its no longer than 3 mins...unless you come up with something radical that warrants the extra running time.

Hey cheers for the reply, i was thinking its maybe to long myself.
This is just the live version thou!
I will be starting to record a single version soon so thanks for your input, much appreciated.

Chris

 

[Muso1070]

Any other ideas how to improve the video?
All feedback is appreciated, good or bad!

 

[Muso1070]

For anyone who enjoyed the song here are the lyrics

Tonight by Chris Keys

V.1 When will you see
what you mean to me
listen to your heart
and walk on out, from the dark.
HHHHHHHMMMMM -----------
what must i do
to make it clear to you
love is all we need
so please oh please, wait for me.

C.1 And the day will turn into the night
with you by my side to hold
and the moon beams down
over our little town
it feels so right, tonight ----------
Oh -- Oh ---------- Oh -- Oh ------------ Oh -- Oh

V.2 How can i try
to keep you on my side
believe in all you dream
and meet me somewhere in between.
HHHHHHHMMMMM -----------
One of these days
we might find our way
two lost and lonely minds
oh please oh please, oh be mine.

C.2 Repeat C.1 with 4th line:
It shines so bright, tonight -----------
Oh -- Oh ---------- Oh -- Oh ------------ Oh -- Oh
2x Oh -- Oh ---------- Oh -- Oh ------------ Oh -- Oh